Name: Goomba
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Race: Subrosian
Class: Explorer
Looks: Large blue eyes with very good eyesight that can pierce even the darkest night, relatively short.
Clothes: Green cloak with triforce stitched onto sleeves (very soft but durable material, Sapphire ring on right hand with triforve symbol embossed onto it (not easily visible as cloak covers hands most of the time)
Personality: Very friendly but appears solitary and takes a long time to trust people. Hard working, will not stop till any task set for him is finished.
Biography: Grew up with his dad, a smithy, and never new his mother. His dad taught him well and that is how he knows so much about smithing and types of metal. Left home when 15 and travelled hyrule learning how to live alone, although prefers warm places like subrosia. His grandfather once told him there was something special about his mothers line and gave him his mothers cloak which he still wears. Discovered the cloak magical properties when a rockslide fell on him and passed around him. Also has started to discover magical powers that he is still not sure of.
Item storage: Magical pouch on the inside of his cloak and a moneybag. The pouch can store more than its size but not unbelievable amounts. Just enought to fit a small shield and a short sword along with few simthing tools.
Skills: Fights well in combat with his staff. Also can fight well with shield and sword. Has the power to control heat and lava but is still unsure of how much he can do with this power.
Weapon: Always carries a light metal staff that his dad gave him before he left home. Also has a small shield and short sword.
Starting Place: Subrosian Village
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Goomba, loomba, doombadeedoo! If it wasn't a subrosian I wouldn't let you get away with the name, but subrosians are silly 
I'll forgive you the short looks and clothes section, because well, subrosians are easy to describe. But you've got to give me a longer personality and biography.
And please get rid of your belt pouch of doom
Just give him a backpack already.
Also you might want to run a spellcheck.
That will be all for today.
I'll forgive you the short looks and clothes section, because well, subrosians are easy to describe. But you've got to give me a longer personality and biography.
And please get rid of your belt pouch of doom
Just give him a backpack already.Also you might want to run a spellcheck.
That will be all for today.
Name: Goomba
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Race: Subrosian
Class: Explorer
Looks: Large blue eyes with very good eyesight that can pierce even the darkest night, relatively short.
Clothes: Green cloak with triforce stitched onto sleeves (very soft but durable material, Sapphire ring on right hand with triforce symbol embossed onto it (not easily visible as cloak covers hands most of the time)
Personality: Although his father taught him well he has had rather a harsh upbringing making him have no patience with people who are lazy or people who are to full of themselves. Doesn’t friends easily as he feels that people just want him to do things for them instead of having a friendship of mutual benefit. Very wary of Zoras as he has had bad incidents with them in the past.
Biography: Grew up with his dad, a smithy, and never new his mother. His dad taught him well and that is how he knows so much about smithing and types of metal. Left home when 15 and travelled hyrule learning how to live alone, although prefers warm places like subrosia. His grandfather once told him there was something special about his mother’s line and gave him his mother’s cloak which he still wears. Discovered the cloak magical properties when a rockslide fell on him and passed around him. Also has started to discover magical powers that he is still not sure of. When he was about 17 he became friends with another subrosian called Verona only to lose her as she drowned in a mountain lake. He blames the Zoras for her death as it was a Zora who took her back (as a joke it seems) and that is why she went too close to the water. The young Zora thought that all beings could swim and thus just ran off home. At first he mourned her death but gradually he decided that it was his fault and that is another reason he has few friends.
Item storage: Small messenger bag over his left shoulder. The bag can store a lot but not unbelievable amounts. Just enough to fit a small shield and a short sword along with few smithing tools.
Skills: Fights well in combat with his staff. Also can fight well with shield and sword. Has the power to control heat and lava but is still unsure of how much he can do with this power.
Weapon: Always carries a light metal staff that his dad gave him before he left home. Also has a small shield and short sword.
Starting Place: Subrosian Village
I did everything that you said, i hope that it is to your liking
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Race: Subrosian
Class: Explorer
Looks: Large blue eyes with very good eyesight that can pierce even the darkest night, relatively short.
Clothes: Green cloak with triforce stitched onto sleeves (very soft but durable material, Sapphire ring on right hand with triforce symbol embossed onto it (not easily visible as cloak covers hands most of the time)
Personality: Although his father taught him well he has had rather a harsh upbringing making him have no patience with people who are lazy or people who are to full of themselves. Doesn’t friends easily as he feels that people just want him to do things for them instead of having a friendship of mutual benefit. Very wary of Zoras as he has had bad incidents with them in the past.
Biography: Grew up with his dad, a smithy, and never new his mother. His dad taught him well and that is how he knows so much about smithing and types of metal. Left home when 15 and travelled hyrule learning how to live alone, although prefers warm places like subrosia. His grandfather once told him there was something special about his mother’s line and gave him his mother’s cloak which he still wears. Discovered the cloak magical properties when a rockslide fell on him and passed around him. Also has started to discover magical powers that he is still not sure of. When he was about 17 he became friends with another subrosian called Verona only to lose her as she drowned in a mountain lake. He blames the Zoras for her death as it was a Zora who took her back (as a joke it seems) and that is why she went too close to the water. The young Zora thought that all beings could swim and thus just ran off home. At first he mourned her death but gradually he decided that it was his fault and that is another reason he has few friends.
Item storage: Small messenger bag over his left shoulder. The bag can store a lot but not unbelievable amounts. Just enough to fit a small shield and a short sword along with few smithing tools.
Skills: Fights well in combat with his staff. Also can fight well with shield and sword. Has the power to control heat and lava but is still unsure of how much he can do with this power.
Weapon: Always carries a light metal staff that his dad gave him before he left home. Also has a small shield and short sword.
Starting Place: Subrosian Village
I did everything that you said, i hope that it is to your liking
The bio and personality sections are still a bit short. Also, make sure that you write complete sentences instead of just just a brief description.
Name: Goomba
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Race: Subrosian
Class: Explorer
Looks: He has large blue eyes with very good eyesight that can pierce even the darkest night, he is relatively short.
Clothes: He Wears a green cloak with triforce stitched onto sleeves (very soft but durable material, Sapphire ring on right hand with triforce symbol embossed onto it (not easily visible as cloak covers hands most of the time)
Personality: Although his father taught him well he has had rather a harsh upbringing making him have no patience with people who are lazy or people who are to full of themselves. Doesn’t friends easily as he feels that people just want him to do things for them instead of having a friendship of mutual benefit. Very wary of Zoras as he has had bad incidents with them in the past. Will always ask questions if he wants to know something, particularly about foreign smithing methods. He doesn’t have any phobias other than water as he can’t swim.
Biography: He grew up with his dad, a smithy, and never new his mother. His dad taught him well and that is how he knows so much about smithing and types of metal. Left home when 15 and travelled Hyrule learning how to live alone, although prefers warm places like Subrosia. His grandfather once told him there was something special about his mother’s line and gave him his mother’s cloak which he still wears.
Discovered the cloak magical properties when a rockslide fell on him and passed around him. Also has started to discover magical powers that he is still not sure of. One day, when he was about 15 he realised that the life of a smithy was not for him and decided to become an adventurer. He went down to his dads workshop and told him his intentions. His dad immediately gave him a small metal staff and a map of Hyrule that had once been given to him for helping a lost traveller who had fallen into Subrosia.
When he was about 17 he became friends with another subrosian called Verona only to lose her as she drowned in a mountain lake. He blames the Zoras for her death as it was a Zora who took her back (as a joke it seems) and that is why she went too close to the water. The young Zora thought that all beings could swim and thus just ran off home. At first he mourned her death but gradually he decided that it was his fault and that is another reason he has few friends.
Item storage: He has a small messenger bag over his left shoulder. The bag can store a lot but not unbelievable amounts, Just enough to fit a small shield and a short sword along with few smithing tools.
Skills: He fights well in combat with his staff. Also he can fight well with shield and sword. He does have the power to control heat and lava but is still unsure of how much he can do with this power.
Weapon: He always carries a light metal staff that his dad gave him before he left home. Also he has a small shield and short sword.
Starting Place: Subrosian Village
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The Bio is 265 words so should be long enough and i have bulked out the personality.
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Race: Subrosian
Class: Explorer
Looks: He has large blue eyes with very good eyesight that can pierce even the darkest night, he is relatively short.
Clothes: He Wears a green cloak with triforce stitched onto sleeves (very soft but durable material, Sapphire ring on right hand with triforce symbol embossed onto it (not easily visible as cloak covers hands most of the time)
Personality: Although his father taught him well he has had rather a harsh upbringing making him have no patience with people who are lazy or people who are to full of themselves. Doesn’t friends easily as he feels that people just want him to do things for them instead of having a friendship of mutual benefit. Very wary of Zoras as he has had bad incidents with them in the past. Will always ask questions if he wants to know something, particularly about foreign smithing methods. He doesn’t have any phobias other than water as he can’t swim.
Biography: He grew up with his dad, a smithy, and never new his mother. His dad taught him well and that is how he knows so much about smithing and types of metal. Left home when 15 and travelled Hyrule learning how to live alone, although prefers warm places like Subrosia. His grandfather once told him there was something special about his mother’s line and gave him his mother’s cloak which he still wears.
Discovered the cloak magical properties when a rockslide fell on him and passed around him. Also has started to discover magical powers that he is still not sure of. One day, when he was about 15 he realised that the life of a smithy was not for him and decided to become an adventurer. He went down to his dads workshop and told him his intentions. His dad immediately gave him a small metal staff and a map of Hyrule that had once been given to him for helping a lost traveller who had fallen into Subrosia.
When he was about 17 he became friends with another subrosian called Verona only to lose her as she drowned in a mountain lake. He blames the Zoras for her death as it was a Zora who took her back (as a joke it seems) and that is why she went too close to the water. The young Zora thought that all beings could swim and thus just ran off home. At first he mourned her death but gradually he decided that it was his fault and that is another reason he has few friends.
Item storage: He has a small messenger bag over his left shoulder. The bag can store a lot but not unbelievable amounts, Just enough to fit a small shield and a short sword along with few smithing tools.
Skills: He fights well in combat with his staff. Also he can fight well with shield and sword. He does have the power to control heat and lava but is still unsure of how much he can do with this power.
Weapon: He always carries a light metal staff that his dad gave him before he left home. Also he has a small shield and short sword.
Starting Place: Subrosian Village
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The Bio is 265 words so should be long enough and i have bulked out the personality.
It looks nice and lengthy. One thing I'd like to say is watch your grammar and spelling, but I've seen worse.
Check one from me.
Check one from me.
What Collin said.
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