Name: Karreth

Gender: Female

Age: 14

Race: Rito

Class: Guide

Looks: Kaareth is a fairly tall thin Rito with large wings. She has dark coloured wings and slightly lighter coloured skin (or are those feathers too, I can't tell). She has hazel eyes and very good eyesight. Finally she has a slim build but has a strong upper body from flying long distances.

Clothing: She wears a light blue tunic with a black sash wrapped around her middle. She wears black arm bands and a bandana around her neck with the large end at the back. She also carries a strip of leather around with her that she wraps aroung her feet and fastens with a clip when she needs to walk any distance.

Personality: Kaareth is very social but when she is working she prefers to work by herself. She is also fairly talkative and has many friends. She can be bossy but overall she is a person who is fun to be around.

Biography: Kaareth was sitting in her room when her brother burst in and said "Hey guess what!"
"What?" she said.
"You got the job! I got stuck with letter sorting but you get to be a guide!"
"YES!!!" she exclaimed as she ran out of the room to tell her friends.

Later in the day she set off on her first trip with a group of young Ritos in tow and and boat with other, non flying, people below. Soon though the wind began to pick up and the waves grew large so she lead the group back toward Dragon Roost Island where they would be safe from the approaching storm. When they got there she thought that she was missing someone, little did she know that the missing person was there but was hiding from her. And so she set out into the storm to find someone who wasn't missing. She got lost in the storm and ended up in the middle of an island that was who-knows-where. Oh dear, she thought now this is going to be an adventure.

Item Storage: Kaareth carries a small blue pack on her hip that is tied around her waist and she also has a little brown wallet tied to her ankle so that she would feel it if it was touched or if it fell off.

Skills: Her combat skills are limited but she does have sharp claws on her feet and can hit people quite hard over the head with her arms and wings.

Weapon: In her small bag she carries a long stick that folds but can also deliver quite a blow, it has a sharp end. Her keen eyesight also makes her a wonderful friend in battle. She is also fast with her long staff and can hit very hard though she can't run very fast.

Starting Place Dragon Roost Island

Could you make her personality and biography a tad longer? Other than that your app is decent enough

Do you want me to re-post it or just edit the original?

I don't know a thing sorry.

Repost the edited version. So we can see what kind of adjustments you made.

Edit: If you do well, you got my check too, it looks great.

Here's my edited application, I made my Personality and Bio sections a bit longer. Hope you like it.


Name: Karreth

Gender: Female

Age: 14

Race: Rito

Class: Guide

Looks: Kaareth is a fairly tall thin Rito with large wings. She has dark coloured wings and slightly lighter coloured skin (or are those feathers too, I can't tell). She has hazel eyes and very good eyesight. Finally she has a slim build but has a strong upper body from flying long distances.

Clothing: She wears a light blue tunic with a black sash wrapped around her middle. She wears black arm bands and a bandana around her neck with the large end at the back. She also carries a strip of leather around with her that she wraps aroung her feet and fastens with a clip when she needs to walk any distance.

Personality: Kaareth is very social but when she is working she prefers to work by herself. She is also fairly talkative and has many friends. She can be bossy but overall she is a person who is fun to be around. She can alays find the silver lining in a situation and tries (and fails) to make good jokes. She's usually in a good mood but she can be very rude when she is angry and when she is sad she draws herself in though she rarely cries.

Biography: As Kaareth handed in her application to become a guide for those traveling the Great Sea she sighed, thinking I'll never get this job I don;t think that they'll let me. I'm young and even though I'm strong they'll never think I'm strong enough to fly long distances like that but I CAN!! ... Oh well. She walked away to go in her room. When she got there her mom was standing outside the door with something in a box. "I baked cake for my little girl's special day!" she said.
"Oh! Thanks mom! You see this is why I love birthdays."
"Well you are 14 so soon you'll be getting a job along wiht your brother. I hope you get the job that you wanted."
"Thanks again mom, for all the support I mean. Bye."

Kaareth was sitting in her room when her brother burst in and said "Hey guess what!"
"What?" she said.
"You got the job! I got stuck with letter sorting but you get to be a guide!"
"YES!!!" she exclaimed as she ran out of the room to tell her friends.

Later in the day she set off on her first trip with a group of young Ritos in tow and and boat with other, non flying, people below. Soon though the wind began to pick up and the waves grew large so she lead the group back toward Dragon Roost Island where they would be safe from the approaching storm. When they got there she thought that she was missing someone, little did she know that the missing person was there but was hiding from her. And so she set out into the storm to find someone who wasn't missing. She got lost in the storm and ended up in the middle of an island that was who-knows-where. Oh dear, she thought now this is going to be an adventure.

Item Storage: Kaareth carries a small blue pack on her hip that is tied around her waist and she also has a little brown wallet tied to her ankle so that she would feel it if it was touched or if it fell off.

Skills: Her combat skills are limited but she does have sharp claws on her feet and can hit people quite hard over the head with her arms and wings.

Weapon: In her small bag she carries a long stick that folds but can also deliver quite a blow, it has a sharp end. Her keen eyesight also makes her a wonderful friend in battle. She is also fast with her long staff and can hit very hard though she can't run very fast.

Starting Place: Dragon Roost Island

And that's it.

Apart from some spelling errors/typos every here and there I do think this looks good. I'm not going to nitpick on anything here.

Check 1.

Oops... I'm not known for spelling errors and typos but whatever.

YAY!

Well now I'm just waiting for my second check (not to rush you guys or anything).

Hmm, you mistyped your own name in your app! Also, if you flew out to find someone, shouldn't you start in the middle of the Great Ocean? Or somewhere that's not Dragon Roost? Well, just do whatever's convenient for you. I think apart from the minor mistakes it's a decent app. I'll let you in.